Drafting and Planning: DBSh improved

Article on Double Page Spread

After speaking to my teacher, he has analyses a couple of things that were wrong with my Double Page Spread, including the fact that my font size was too big. I was writing in font size 11 and the maximum size was meant to be 9, therefore I had to decrease my whole text. This meant that I had way too much negative space on my Double Page Spread. Negative Space is not something that is not often found in magazines and so I had to add to the story. I have added another aspect into Tom Harrison's life and in that extra paragraph I released how he primarily got into music. To kill some negative space I have also made some quotes bold to attract attention and add spice, colour and flamboyance to the two pages.

http://amateurpeople.blogspot.co.uk/2015/01/drafting-and-planning-dps-improvemnt.html

This is a link to my first draft of my DBS, on there it can be seen, and now I realize, how boring and plain it is. Except the picture and the title there was nothing on there that seemed interesting. And so after adding in an extra paragraph and highlighting important quotes, the Double Page Spread is more appealing to my target audience.

This is the paragraph that I added:
Harrison’s father owned a record store that was the birthplace of Harrison’s love for music. “When I first heard Anything, Anything by Dramarama, I was shocked by the great sounds that instruments could make.” Each time after his father picked him up from the police station, they came to the store. Harrison's father entertained himself in the storage room with an Irish tea and Harrison fiddled with the big, black record player that was placed in the far back corner of the store. Harrison told us “I always took the best records off their stands when my dad wasn't looking and in my free time I played the life out of them. My favourite records where the ones that were freshly delivered, they had that plastic around them and that new record smell. After hearing a song played on a record player, all other devices are ruined for you. These records tough me life, patience and most of all love, things my dad could never teach me.”

This is the final draft of my double page spread after improvements and it looks amazing, the effects I have given it truly make it look like a real magazine.